can some one edit and tell me what i need to change and take out to make it 500 words my college essay?
need some one to edit and tell me what to change to make it 500 words are less
Life is simple you live then you die. But what isn’t simple is the glass that you look though to see the prospective of life. Some life’s are seen as simple, When others are seen as adventures. I see my life thought a glass of passion. Monday through Saturday practice in the rain, sun and snow. Running till my machine won’t let me anymore. Helmet to helmet booms which make bone breaking tones. All in the pursuit of one goal passing thought or stopping some one from passing though a line called the goal line .the line is defeat and success, it’s ying and yang, darkness and light. It’s something which the game uses as a learning tool.
experience was the philosopher stone in the equation to make me the person I am today. experience which would infuses the passion for the things I do. struggle to greatness is what I do, and did since I was 10. Having always wonted to make my dreams come true, but working is what gets you there which growing up in highlands ranch Colorado did plus more for me.
Being a black male you are all ready looked at as a disease already being labeled before you have a chance to do anything. But you know what’s harder being a black male in a place called highlands ranch which has under 5% diversity .it’s a place that’s make harvred look like a pre school . It’s were money is at the top of the food chain, were people had it or had more of it. Adversity and experience is what I’ve faced being in this environment which struggled me to were my passion was, football a burning fire of passion for me holding me on a cold adversity filled night. football has always meant a lot to me, I was the boy that as a kid I wonted to play college football and that was what I was going to do since I was 10 till the end of my first semester 11 grad year and you couldn’t tell me otherwise, know matter what you said. It made me still struggled my way to my passion even in the expense of school work and study time. Using the passion I had to reach my goal as fuel, pumping it out as I prepared my self with the tools I needed to achieve my goal. Which payed off I got to play varsity football since my sophomore year. Which I thought would almost set in stone my goal of playing college football, the thing I thought I was put on this earth to do. but you know what I was wrong.
the first semester of my 11 grad year was the worst 5.5 month or 150 days or 1,050hours or 63,000 minutes or 3,780,000 secs of my life. the first semester 11 grad year I got 2 d and a c. now I’ve never been the kind of person that was a student at heart but ive never really had problems in school, always managing to get a 3.0 or above except for the first semester of fresh man year and the first semester of my junior year. but the first semester of my junior year changed my world and life forever and my grad was the thing that did this for me. In spit me not being a student at heart , the one thing I was known for is my passion for goals which I wonted to reach. This truing point was were I saw my life’s glass of passion for the first time. What happed my junior year is that . I had a teacher that I didn’t get along with and he gave me a grad in his class that my work ethic does not deserve. His class also affected my grads in 2 other classes to. Which I would end up getting a d in one and a c in the other. This would make my total high school gpa drop from a 3.0 to a 2.8. This drop in my gpa made me think about how football has tout me a lot of lesions.but the most important one being “ if you Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you’ll land among the stars.”(Brian Littrell ) which I have been doing since I was 10 striving to better my self though hard work ,passion and dedication . I grew up a minority that was at a disadvantage from the start. in highlands ranch Colorado were money is at the top of the food chain. I was part of that 5% ,having to face adversity and struggles along the way. But I worked endlessly working in Oder to make my dreams with I truly felt in my heart was my passion come true. Which turned out just to be a another lesion in my life that education is the one thing in your life that know matter how old you get you will always have. Football is not as important because in the dead it not what you did in your life but how you have changed the world.
My glass of passion is clean now and I have a new goals to become a chiropractor which I know that you have to go to college to become and nothing will stop me in this goal because one have the passion to do something know one can stop me “the reason I succeed is because I don’t know how to quit”(unknown)
Life is simple you live then you die. But what isn’t simple is the glass that you look though to see the prospective of life. Some life’s are seen as simple, When others are seen as adventures.
Life is simple, you live then you die. But what isn’t simple is the glass that you look though to see the prospective of life. Some life’s ???? are seen as simple, when others are seen as adventures.
Don’t have time to read the rest – but you ought to put into Word or something with spell/grammar check to make sure you don’t have errors. Avoid starting a sentence with “But”