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09/08/2019

Can somebody proofread this essay?

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Can somebody proofread this essay?
Make sure commas, semicolons, and everything is used correctly?

Fundamental Writing Essay Ch. 13

Writing an essay is a rather intricate thing to do, but if you follow a few easy steps writing an essay can be almost as easy as answering questions. Chapter thirteen in Sentences, Paragraphs, and Essays, a textbook written by Lee and Kelly Brandon, explains these steps to writing a very well developed essay. The book contains content on special paragraphs such as introductions and conclusions, and shows the relation of an essay to paragraphs. In fact, this paragraph is considered to be an introduction. However chapter thirteen looks deeper into what an introduction is.

Introductions do many things: attract the reader’s attention, states the topic of the essay, and transitions the reader to the paragraphs in the body of the essay. Most writers struggle and have problems with introductions; specifically the first sentence which in most instances tends to be the topic sentence. There are a few easy methods for the troubled writer who is trying to formulate a professional introduction. These methods include: directly stating the topic, giving some background information on the topic, defining a specific term that relates to the topic of the essay, a quotation, a shocking statement or attention getter, or a question. The writer should select the method that will be most effective for the target audience. When attempting to transition from the introduction to the body paragraphs, the writer may find themselves in another stalemating predicament. The solution for the once again troubled writer would be to try and think of a creative way to show the closure of the paragraph and lead the audience’s attention into a closer look on the subject at hand.

Conclusions seem to be another part of the essay writing process that stumps writers. Many writers find themselves basically rewriting their introduction. This can make the writing very unprofessional. Conclusions unlike introductions should not continue to grab the reader’s attention but should inform the reader that all the main points have been discussed and that it is time for closure. A person should never “copy and paste” the introduction into the conclusion section of an essay. Rewording the topic statement in different words is acceptable, but complete repetition of the introduction is not. Effective conclusion writing methods include: restating the thesis in different words, reviewing the main points of the discussion, an anecdote relating to the topic, and/or a quote related to the topic at hand. Each of those techniques is a specific and simple procedure on how to write the beginning of a conclusion.

Another great point the textbook emphasizes is how the many simple actions of a writer tie together to form an essay. Words make sentences, sentences make paragraphs, and paragraphs make essay. It illustrated the process of converting thoughts and statements into a well organized and legible essay. Also, the text does an excellent job explaining many features of writing such as: outlining what an essay is, the particular parts of an essay, using graphs, creating introductions, formulating the body of the essay, and how to construct a professional conclusion. The chapter even includes bullets referencing what type of content and material should be contained in each particular paragraph.

Attempting to write an essay is not the easiest obstacle to master, but by following simple steps it can be done. Many methods are available to the writer trying to create introductions and conclusions, and by keeping these methods in mind, the struggle of trying to write an essay should lighten. In the end, the writer should have created a clear, well constructed, professional essay.

ANSWER
You need to put ‘inverted commas’ on the title of the book, or have it written in Italics.

Second paragraph should be more like: (with semi-colons and change states to ‘state’)
Introductions do many things: attract the reader’s attention; state the topic of the essay; and transitions the reader to the paragraphs in the body of the essay.

These methods include directly stating the topic, giving some background information on the topic, and defining a specific term that relates to the topic of the essay: a quotation, a shocking statement, an attention getter, or a question.

In the paragraph on conclusions, a comma after the word ‘Conclusions’ on the third line is appropriate, with another after the word ‘introductions’. At the end of that paragraph, I would use ‘Each of these techniques is a….” because they have just been mentioned, and therefore should be in that tense.

Another great point the textbook emphasizes is how the many simple actions of a writer tie together to form an essay. Words make sentences, sentences make paragraphs, and paragraphs make –AN– essay

I don’t think the following sentence runs properly; it’s like you’ve mixed a list in with other information:
Also, the text does an excellent job explaining many features of writing such as: outlining what an essay is, the particular parts of an essay, using graphs, creating introductions, formulating the body of the essay, and how to construct a professional conclusion.

I’d probably use […] myself:
Also, the text does an excellent job explaining many features of writing such as outlining: what an essay is; the particular parts of an essay; the use of graphs; and the creation of introductions, as well as information on formulating the body of the essay and constructing of a professional conclusion.