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09/08/2019

Can someone correct my essay? (it is really short)?

QUESTION
Can someone correct my essay? (it is really short)?
Hi everybody,
I am making practice for the writing part of the TOEFL exam. This is the integrated task, so i had to read a passage, listen to a lecture and then summarize all the points. I think it is good about contents, but I am sure there are plenty of lacks about grammars and spelling mistakes ( I am studying alone, so nobody usually correct me. Thank you for your help!

The reading passage states that the scholars have long questioned about the authenticity of Shakespeare’s plays. In support of this, the writer provides three reasons. However, the speaker believes that there aren’t enough proofs to believe that Shakespeare did not write his works.
According to the article, someone believes that Shakespeare was too poor and without a proper education to be the man that have wrote all the plays that we know. The speaker disagrees with that. He says that be poor and obscured, it doesn’t necessarily mean that one is also not educated. Moreover, Shakespeare was a son of a tradesman and he has had plenty of opportunities to take contact with the english aristocracy.
The article writes also that today we have got really few concrete facts of the real life of Shakespeare. This is really strange, considering the importance of his work. However, the speaker says that all the information about Shakespeare’s life could have been lost in the many years that separe him from us. So, it is not a plausible proof .
Finally, some scholars believe that there were some contenporary writers pretty similar to the Shakespeare’s way to write. About that, the speaker has any doubts. He takes the example of Bacon who is considered the most similar writer. He says that even tough some works are quite similar, there are many other ones completly different from Shakespeare’s style.
In conclusion, the speaker believes that there are any reason, or any proofs, that explain these alternatives theories.

ANSWER
Ok, I can take a few minutes. I’m just going to correct grammar, not change the style. It’s too long for me to mark corrections, I’ll just rewrite:

The passage states that scholars have long questioned the authenticity of Shakespeare’s plays. In support of this, the writer provides three reasons. However, he believes that there aren’t enough proofs to believe that Shakespeare did not write his works.
According to the article, some believe that Shakespeare was too poor and uneducated to be the man that wrote all of the plays that we know. The speaker disagrees with that premise. He says that to be poor and obscure doesn’t necessarily mean that one is also not educated. Moreover, Shakespeare was the son of a tradesman and had plenty of opportunities to take contact with the english aristocracy.
The article states also that today we have really few concrete facts about the real life of Shakespeare. This is really strange, considering the importance of his work. However, the speaker says that much the information about Shakespeare’s life could have been lost in the many years that separate him from us. So, it is not a plausible proof .
Finally, some scholars believe that there were some contemporary writers doing work similar to Shakespeare’s writing style. About that, the speaker has many doubts. He takes the example of Bacon who is considered the most similar writer. He says that even though some works are quite similar, there are many others completely different from Shakespeare’s style.
In conclusion, the speaker believes that there aren’t any reasons, or any proofs, that would justify these alternative theories.
Again, just grammar and some better words. I would write some parts completely differently, but then it would be my writing instead of yours…………..