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09/07/2019

Could you help me with my essay? Could you grade my essay?

QUESTION
Could you help me with my essay? Could you grade my essay?
I’m not English mother tongue…

How I see my future

In my future I am in big city as New York, Los Angeles or London, I am married with sons, I have a nice family and a good job. I work in finance and management, I am expert in economics, law, statistics and business. I speak foreign language and I travel in fantastic places with my family. I’m proud to be who I am and I’m proud to live in a modern state. I hope to live in United States in my future. I have to study so much to realize my self. In my future I do sports all the days, and I use my mind all the days. I live each day with the smile and I have an excellent health. I hope also to become a good teacher and to be an active member of my community. I am rich in my future and I have a lot of free time to live with my friends.

ANSWER
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In the future I envision myself living in a big city such as New York, Los Angeles or London. I am married with sons. I have a nice family and a good job. I work in the field of finance and management. I am an expert in economics, law, statistics and business. I speak several foreign languages and I travel in fantastic places with my family. I’m proud to be who I am and I’m proud to live in a modern country.

I hope to live in United States in my future. I have to study so much to realize my goals. In the future I will participate in sports and I will use my mind all the time. I will live each day with a smile on my face and I will be in excellent health. I hope also to become a good teacher and to be an active member of my community. I will be financially secure and have a lot of free time to spend with my friends.