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09/08/2019

Edit my 5 paragraph Essay?

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Edit my 5 paragraph Essay?
I’m using my sisters account. Please don’t be mean about my essay I’m a youngster still in middle school. Just need some sentences smoother i think and some commas in the right place, Anything you can do to help would be amazing! Well here it is.

In an essay, explain how disappointments/mistakes can have a good side.

The hardest times in your life drown you in pain and desperation, how can any good come of them? As Gilda Radner Said “I wanted a perfect ending. Now I’ve learned, the hard way, that some poems don’t rhyme, and some stories don’t have a clear beginning, middle, and end. Life is about not knowing, having to change, taking the moment and making the best of it, without knowing what’s going to happen next. Delicious Ambiguity.” It’s you who makes the choice as to how things go in your life. Disappointments aren’t anything to fear there something to look forward to. Disappointments have a good side to them because they let you see things in a new light in life, you grow stronger from them, and you’ll learn never to make that same mistake again.

Seeing things in a new perspective will help you in more ways then you could ever imagine. When you just had a grand disappointment you’ll feel terrible. But watch, once you get over it you’ll have a new point of view towards things. Instead of looking at things for the worst, look at it for the best! Turn it around make something good out of that situation! If there were to be no disappointments in your life you’d be stuck looking at life through one point of view. The worst thing in the world could be the best. It’s up to you and how you deal with the situation. It might be horrific, but you got have a new view of life, and how much of a blessing is that?

With out no mistakes where would we be right now? No where. In order to you live your life you must take chances and risks and the odds are that in some point or another your going to mess up. But it’s okay you go to know that there’s no where to go but up. Don’t let mistakes hold you back take them and grow from them become a better person. You can’t grow if you don’t allow yourself to mess up every once in a while. When you mess up take advantage of it and learn from it instead of feeling down. Just because you made a mistake it doesn’t mean its the end of the world it means its simply a turning point in you life.

How will you learn if you never tried? Making mistakes should just be a reminder not to do it again and to move on. Not a time of remorse and regret, because you can’t go back and change it. We can’t stop time but we can learn a lot from our mistakes. Just take the time to learn from your mistakes and I can assure you it wont happen again. No ones perfect we all make mistakes we just got to learn how to turn the situation around. There’s so many things we can do when something goes wrong but what we need to do is learn that life continues on. Every mistake is a new opportunity to grow as a person. Take advantage of it and you’ll life will completely change.

Mistakes and disappointments are anything but terrible. You see life in ways you never did before, you evolve as a person, and you learn more then you ever could about yourself. Mistakes are a new opportunity not a time of grief and sadness. Your as stronger as you ever could be. Your as wise as you could be. Mistakes make us who we are today. Its your choice take it as you wish but do you really want to live your life regretting every mistake you made? Or do you want to look back and smile because you know it only made you stronger?

ANSWER
Here’s my corrected version:

The hardest times in your life drown you in pain and desperation. How can any good come of them? As Gilda Radner said, “I wanted a perfect ending. Now I’ve learned, the hard way, that some poems don’t rhyme, and some stories don’t have a clear beginning, middle, and end. Life is about not knowing, having to change, taking the moment and making the best of it, without knowing what’s going to happen next. Delicious Ambiguity.” It’s you who makes the choice as to how things go in your life. Disappointments aren’t anything to fear, they’re something to look forward to. Disappointments have a good side to them because they let you see things in a new light in life. You grow stronger from them, and you’ll learn never to make that same mistake again.

Seeing things in a new perspective will help you in more ways than you could ever imagine. When you just had a grand disappointment, you’ll feel terrible. But watch, once you get over it, you’ll have a new point of view towards things. Instead of looking at things for the worst, look at them for the best! Turn it around and make something good out of that situation! If there were to be no disappointments in your life, you’d be stuck looking at life through one point of view. The worst thing in the world could be the best. It’s up to you and how you deal with the situation. It might be horrific, but you got to have a new view of life. How much of a blessing is that?

Without any mistakes, where would we be right now? Nowhere. In order to you live your life, you must take chances and risks. The odds are that at some point or another, you’re going to mess up. But it’s okay you go to know that there’s nowhere to go but up. Don’t let mistakes hold you back. Take them and grow from them to become a better person. You can’t grow if you don’t allow yourself to mess up every once in a while. When you mess up, take advantage of it, and learn from it instead of feeling down. Just because you made a mistake it doesn’t mean it’s the end of the world. It means i’ts simply a turning point in you life.

How will you learn if you have never tried? Making mistakes should just be a reminder not to do it again and to move on. This is not a time of remorse and regret, because you can’t go back and change it. We can’t stop time, but we can learn a lot from our mistakes. Just take the time to learn from your mistakes and I can assure you it won’t happen again. No one’s perfect; we all make mistakes. We just have to learn how to turn the situation around. There’s so many things we can do when something goes wrong. What we need to do is learn that life continues on. Every mistake is a new opportunity to grow as a person. Take advantage of it, and your life will completely change.

Mistakes and disappointments are anything but terrible. You will see life in ways you never did before. You will evolve as a person, and you will learn more then you ever could about yourself. Mistakes are a new opportunity, not a time of grief and sadness. You’re as strong as you ever could be. You’re as wise as you could be. Mistakes make us who we are today. It’s your choice. Take it as you wish, but do you really want to live your life regretting every mistake you made? Or, do you want to look back and smile because you know it only made you stronger?

Good essay btw.