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09/04/2019

Help me edit my college application essay?

QUESTION
Help me edit my college application essay?
College application essay

“Looks like this will be the last one of these you have to come to” said Mr. Woodward to me with a big smile on his face. He was talking about an IEP meeting and how I would never have to do one again. To most people this means nothing and to some people might now even know what it mean but none the less this moment was the most proud I have ever been.
IEP stands for Individualized Education Program which in short terms means students with special needs. I was one of those kids ever since second grade and I never thought I was “slower” but you have to take in consideration when a child is in 4th grade and can barely read that something is defiantly wrong. I don’t think it was because I was ‘special’ it could had very well been from my late of caring and my parents not pushing me but whatever the reason was I was behind everyone else.
Middle school was the hardest time in my life and I think it’s that way for a lot of kids. You’re going through crazy things and it can be very stressful. About that time I settled with the fact I was just… well “dumb” and I gave up for the most part. It wasn’t till high school I realized I shouldn’t be put with that group of kids. Now, that sounds pretty harsh but I always felt like I wasn’t being pushed and tested. Everything was so easy and I got bored very easy.
From then on I was determined to prove I could handle a biggest responsibility because I knew I was just as smart as everyone else! I began to give 100% and for some of my favorite classes I gave even more. Then near the end of my junior year all the hard work had paid off. I went to my last IEP meeting. Now, in my senior year I’m still pushing myself and haven’t let up an inch. I’m taking a AP history class, I’m in a advanced group in my English class and determined to make it into a good college. All these things I never thought possible four years ago.

ANSWER
This is a pretty good essay.

“Looks like this will be the last one of these you have to come to” said Mr. Woodward [CUT] with a big smile on his face. [THIS WAS OUT LAST IEP meeting] [T]his moment was the most proud I have ever been.

IEP stands for Individualized Education Program [, AN EDUCATIONAL PROGRAM FOR] students with special needs. I was one of those kids ever since second grade. [CUT] I never thought I was “slower” but [CUT] when a child is in 4th grade and can barely read [CUT] something is defiantly [SPELLING] wrong. [CUT] I was behind everyone else.

Middle school was the hardest time in my life and I think it’s that way for a lot of kids. You’re going through crazy things [CRAZY THINGS IS TOO VAGUE] and it can be very stressful. About that time I [BELIEVED THAT] I was just [CUT] “dumb” and I gave up for the most part. It wasn’t [UNTIL] high school I realized I [COULD DO BETTER].

From then on I was determined to prove [CUT] was just as smart as everyone else[.] I began to give 100% and for some of my favorite classes I gave even more [YOU CAN’T GIVE MORE THAN 100%]. [N]ear the end of my junior year all the hard work had paid off. I went to my last IEP meeting. Now, in my senior year I’m still pushing myself and haven’t let up an inch. I’m taking a[N] AP history class, I’m in a advanced group in my English class and determined to make it into a good college. All these things I never thought possible four years ago.