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09/07/2019

help with my thesis statement?

QUESTION
help with my thesis statement?
i’m writing a research paper on malaria in Nigeria…
my thesis statement was so, what is malaria, how is it transmitted, and what are the symptoms of the disease? my teacher told me not to make my thesis statement a question so i changed it to : one may wonder what malaria is, how it is transmitted, and what the symptoms of the disease are. now, she says it sounds weirdly worded

can you please help me out…… how can i word this & make it sound good at the same time?

ANSWER
a thesis statement is supposed to be 1 sentence that tells the reader what ur essay is about. So in this case, ur thesis would be something like:
Malaria is a ____(describe it. dangerous? rare? not that big of a dea? etc.)type of disease that is transmitted through____ (how its transmitted)and can cause various symptoms including____(give only 1-2 examples. u want to save the rest of the symptoms for the body paragraphs).

btw, r u only writing on wat malaria is? cus idk y but i get this feeling that ur essay doesn’t have much point to it no offense. it seems like somethings missing. like maybe how dangerous malaria can be or the percentage of ppl affected by it or how it can be cured….etc..etc..etc… but if ur going to put those ideas in then u also have to mention it in the thesis. here’s one way:
Malaria is a ____(describe it. dangerous? rare? not that big of a dea? etc.)type of disease that is transmitted through____ (how its transmitted) and causes various symptoms like____(give only 1-2 examples. u want to save the rest of the symptoms for the body paragraphs) in its victims, which is about____(% or ration) for the human population.