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09/04/2019

How have you guys tackled your UC personal statements?

QUESTION
How have you guys tackled your UC personal statements?
1000 words for two essays. It ain’t easy. How’d you guys do it?

Would be nice if you could share some samples
or summaries fo what you guys talked about
and HOW you presented it

And please tell me whether you guys got accepted and to which UC’s)

ANSWER
I would be happy to edit your personal statement.

A personal statement usually includes the following. You need a good attention grabber. In general you want your essay to follow this order:

Paragraph 1-2 attention grabber. Think of an experience in your life that really showcases who you are. Be detailed. Discuss something significant in your life. It could be anything. Or discuss why you want to be in your profession or what story inspired you to study what you are studying.

Paragraph 3-4. Highlight your academics: GPA, classes. What skills you learned in class that will help in succeeding in college. Awards and honors that you have received. Sports or clubs that you are in.

Paragraph 5. Jobs that you have had that relate to your major? Any other things about yourself that you want to include

Paragraph 6: Conclusion. In this conclusion you may want to re-state your main qualifications. You can also include any of the following statements: My goal is…. I deserve this scholarship because….

I will edit it for you if you email it to me