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09/07/2019

I am a Chinese and studying English now. Could you please help me to modify and improve my little essay: Review of 13 going on 30.?

QUESTION
I am a Chinese and studying English now. Could you please help me to modify and improve my little essay: Review of 13 going on 30.?
Growing quickly is a big common dream for teenagers, and for them, the adult world is mysterious, hence most of them want to grow quickly for the sake of taking an exciting adventure in the so-called adult world. Yes, Gina, the heroine in the movie, could be you and me. When I was young, sometimes, I drew a picture that I wore some adult-dressings, said some adult-words, and did some adult-things. I wished the time could run fast, and I almost couldn’t wait to think about what I would be like, and what matters would be happen when I became an adult. Everything was perfect in adult world for me at that age.
But, year after year, I nearly become an adult, conversely, I am afraid. I have to encounter and handle lots of things, and the so-called adult world is not like what we thought when I was a little girl. Everything is complicated, and this makes me to wish to return to my youth.
Now, I just want to tell myself: Please cherish the moment I have, because every stage of my life is valuable.

ANSWER
Growing up quickly is a common dream for teenagers, and for most of them, the adult world is mysterious. Thus, most teenagers want to grow up quickly in order to take an exciting adventure into the “adult world.” Yet Gina, the heroine in the movie, could be you or I. Sometimes when I was younger, I drew a picture of myself wearing adult clothes and doing adult things while speaking like an adult. I wished that time would fly by. I thought about what I would be like in the future and what would happen when I became an adult. When I was younger, everything seemed perfect in the adult world; however, year after year, I gradually approached adulthood, and subsequently, I became afraid. As an adult, I have to encounter and handle lots of things, and the adult world is not like what I thought when I was a little girl. Everything is complicated, and I wish to return to my youth. Now, I just want to tell myself: cherish the moment I have because every stage of life is valuable.