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09/04/2019

I need help with my transfer to NYU essay!?

QUESTION
I need help with my transfer to NYU essay!?
Okay so I have a problem. I want to transfer to NYU to be a sophomore there next year, so I made myself a common app account. The personal statement question on the common app says “Please provide a statement that addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve.” However, the NYU supplement essay question says, “In evaluating your candidacy for admission, we are interested in making the best match possible with all that NYU has to offer. As a result, we are curious to learn about your academic and personal interests. Please address, in your essay response, the following question: What are your academic interests and how do you plan to explore them at NYU?”

Isn’t that the same question? So now I’m not sure if I should write one essay for both of them or two different essays, I really need help!!!

ANSWER
NO! Write 2 essays! My sister and I both go to NYU and I helped her write her essay as a transfer student (I am currently doing my masters).
These topics are different, yet both personal. Here are some probes I would think of that might help you.

“Please provide a statement that addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve.”
-Why are you transferring?
-Without “bad mouthing” your current school, it must have been lacking something…So how come it did not meet your needs?
-Do you think NYU would give you more room for growth not only academically, but as a person- an individual?
-Current college physical environment vs NYU environment. (ex. Maybe you go to a SUNY school in the middle of no where- but NYU is at the center of everything in NYC, the city is at your finger tips)
-The environment that the students create at your college. Is it NOT diverse? Does every girl only care about wearing vineyard vines pants and not actually give a crap about her school work? NYU is the epitome of diversity. Scratch that- NYC is the epitome of diversity. There are so many cultures and they are coming together in one huge multi-culutral explosion. It’s NOT boring.
-That being said…Your college’s sense of community vs NYUs. NYU has a lot of community and pride. Students center their lives around the washington square campus, it’s their home. There’s a plethora of opportunities to give back to the community.

—-All these points are relevant to the part of the question about why you want to transfer… what NYU might have that your college doesn’t have. Right? Now considering that what would your objectives be as a new member to this community, like, where do you fit in? —-This part would be briefer because this is the part where it could overlap. I would touch on these points:

-Does NYU offer a better program for your major and are you going to strive to become a professional here in that area and learn everything you can?
-Are you interested in a club, sport, or some other activity- greek life maybe?
-Maybe your goal is to become a part of a bigger picture, a bigger community, something bigger than you- and NYU and NYC attract you that way?

I dont know what your goals are when you come here. But i’m sure you must have them.

“In evaluating your candidacy for admission, we are interested in making the best match possible with all that NYU has to offer. As a result, we are curious to learn about your academic and personal interests. Please address, in your essay response, the following question: What are your academic interests and how do you plan to explore them at NYU?”

-Think about your goals and objectives you spoke of in first essay. Choose what you want to elaborate on.
-Elaborate 1st specifically on your academic area.
-Research the area on the NYU website. Look at the curriculum, the teachers, the highlights of the program.
-You might have professors that are researchers, doctors, authors, theorists, famous in your area. You would be learning from the best.
-Your program might provide fieldwork opportunities or an awesome internship opportunity.
-You might qualify for study abroad in another country or at one of NYUs campuses across the globe. Or you could just express interest in the opportunity.

Basically NYU does offer a lot of opportunities for learning, but you need to go on the NYU website and explore it like hardcore and find interesting things you’d be interested in! Then talk about it in the essay.

My other piece of advice would be to speak about wanting to be a part of a diverse community here in at least one of those essays, or both.