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09/07/2019

Is anybody here to help me to edit my paragraphs?(English as second language)?

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Is anybody here to help me to edit my paragraphs?(English as second language)?
(help me please this is the last part of my essay )Sometimes, studying in this environment is so stressful and it takes so much energy from me. Every time, that I want to send my document to buffalo for renewing my visa, I’m scared to death. Because, I don’t know what I have to do if something happen to any member of my family in the period of not having my passport with me. According to my experiences, always these questions come in my mind: Why I have to be treated differently for the reason that I am coming from Middle East?What are the differences between me and other youths, who are not coming from Middle East? Why most of the time, they open my luggage in the airport?Nobody asked me about where I want to be born so, why I have to be discriminated based on my ethnic. I think, one day, we can change our world to a borderless place, which there will not be any hidden discrimination. This is one of my reasons for studying sociology. As I brought up before, workings for the United Nations have always been my dream, and, I realized in order to make my dream a reality; I don’t need to pursue my education in International Law-Study. For me, there is no word to describe my feeling about sociology. I had many moments that I’ve experienced the intensity of excitement inside myself from leaning a social theory. I believe there is no other program that can satisfy me as sociology does. Regarding to my experiences, I really want to have research and study the hidden discrimination that exists in western countries. Thus, I can analysis this issue and find the reasons, which has created it.

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Sometimes studying in this environment is very stressful and it saps my energy. Each time I forward my visa renewal documents to Buffalo I’m scared to death; what would I do if something happened to a member of my family and I didn’t have my passport with me?

On the basis of my experience I have come to ask myself three questions: Why do people seem to treat me differently because I come from the Middle East? What are the differences between me and other young people, who do not come from the Middle East? Why is my luggage always opened at airport security? Nobody asked me where I would like to be born, so why should I face discrimination on the basis of my ethnicity?

I think that one day we will be able to change our world to one without borders, and that there will no longer be any such hidden discrimination. This is one of my reasons for studying sociology.

As I mentioned before, working for the United Nations has always been my dream, and I now realize that in order to make my dream a reality, it’s not necessarily international law which I need to study.

For me, there are no words to describe my feelings about sociology. I have had many moments in which I’ve experienced an intensity of excitement from leaning a social theory. I believe there is no other program that can satisfy me as much as sociology does.

With respect to my own experiences, I really want to research and study the hidden discrimination that exists in western countries. In doing so I might be able to analyze this issue and determine the reasons which have created it.