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09/07/2019

Please help with my NJHS essay Fast!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!?

QUESTION
Please help with my NJHS essay Fast!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!?
National Junior Honor Society

Because National Junior Honor Society (NJHS) is a group of students that exemplify the traits leadership, integrity, citizenship, and intelligence I find that I would be a ace member of this group. NJHS is also devoted to serving and helping people and the community. I to wish to be in NJHS to help in making our school and community a better place to live and learn. In this essay I shall list examples where I show these traits.

National Junior Honor Society is made up with individuals that have certain strengths in particular fields of knowledge. One skill I am told I have is I have strong leadership. I am a officer of the student council which leadership is needed. I have played a major role in planning the spirt weeks, dance, and pep rally. I also am not influenced by others bad choices and regally help out others to make good choices for themselves. Another trait I posses is I am a good public speaker. I occasionally go on to the announcements to get a message across. Also I have been in many plays where I had to talk in front of a crowd.

A major if not one of the main aspects of NJHS is volunteering. I truly have a passion and a will to help out others by volunteering. Such as I have volunteered at a humane animal rescue. I assisted in grooming and cleaning dogs, all money that was raised by this went charity. Now to something else I believe I am a very responsible person. I always turn in my work on time. I always try 100 percent and do the best I can do. When ever something is asked of me I can always get the job done.

So what do you think of it also i need a ending paragraph please help

ANSWER
Well, I would say to double check your grammar and sentence structure. After reading the first few sentences, I’m sure you could make it better than repeating yourself over and over again. There are quite a few mistakes but I’ll only name a few:
Fix the first paragraph, there are some grammar mistakes. I don’t think you should start with because…
Also, (One skill I am told I have is I have strong leadership) is wrong
(Now to something else I believe I am a very responsible person.) is wrong

Just double check or get an actual peer edit from professionals, I guess that’s why we’re here right? :))
Sorry, I just don’t have much time to edit your whole essay and add another paragraph to it, at least reflect on what I mentioned earlier…