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09/04/2019

University Admission essay?

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University Admission essay?
Does anyone know any tips to write a good university admission essay? I have many topics to write about including my personality, a bench( yes I kid you not)etc… I just want any tips that you can spare as I’m not a particularly good writer. What makes a good essay? What makes a bad one??? please help!

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What Makes a Good College Essay?

This article is an excerpt from the book College Essays That Made a Difference

“The admissions officers reading your essay want it to prove to them two things. First, they want it to show that you can write at a college level, which means that you have a command of the English language and can use it to craft a cogent written statement. They’re not interested in your vocabulary skills, though, so give the thesaurus to your mom and have her hide it. You should be able to write your essay without fancy words whose meaning you don’t understand. (And it is so painfully obvious to admissions officers when you don’t; they’re almost embarrassed for you.)

Admissions officers are interested in seeing that you understand sentence and paragraph structure and can pace a narrative. Oh yes, and that you know what a narrative is in the first place. In case you’re a little unsure, a narrative is simply a story. And unless you’re William Faulkner (who didn’t even graduate from college), the story you tell to the admissions officer through your essay needs to be brief, flow logically from one event to the next, and have a convincing conclusion. People usually act consistently (even if they’re consistently inconsistent), and their pattern of actions more times than not leads to consistent outcomes. You’d have to be a darn clever wordsmith, for example, to convince a reader that a chain smoker could enter the New York City Marathon and win it just because he “had a lot of heart.” Your essay should not require the admissions officer to suspend disbelief. So keep it brief and coherent.

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This does not mean that you should edit your essay down to nothing, or let someone else edit it down to nothing. It shouldn’t sound like a marketing piece. It should sound like the way you would talk (when you speak with correct grammar, of course).

Choosing a topic
Time and again admissions officers tell us that they want to see students write their college essay about something they, the students, actually care about. Write about something you do, not something you would do if you were president of the United States (unless specifically asked to do so). They aren’t interested in reading about your plan for eliminating AIDS from the world. They’re interested in hearing how and why you spent every Wednesday afternoon for the last two years teaching an underprivileged kid how to use a computer, even on days when you didn’t want to or didn’t think you had time. They’re even interested in why you’re passionate about Spider-Man comics.

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Opinion differs from college to college regarding what are good essay topics and what aren’t. There are a few topics that almost invariably send shudders down admissions officers’ backs. These include sex, drugs (especially your sex life or drug use), or violent events in which you participated. Admissions officers also tire of reading travelogues and stories of how you recovered from a sports injury. Want to make them groan? Rehash the extracurricular activities that you already listed on the section of the application devoted to them, or editorialize on the top news item of the day.

Swearing isn’t usually effective, either. They appreciate humor, but if you’re not funny in person, you shouldn’t try to be so on paper. This is why you should have someone else read your essay: if your humor doesn’t elicit the right response from your teacher, it most likely won’t get the reaction you’re looking for in the admissions office.

What do they like to read about? Curiosity, passion, and persistence. These are the sorts of attributes that great college students have. These great students go on to be great alumni. Colleges that have great students and great alumni tend to attract quality applicants, and on the cycle goes. But you shouldn’t tell the admissions office that you are curious, passionate, or persistent; you should show them. Let your narrative do this.

What the Admissions Officers Love to See
Jennifer Wong, director of admissions at Claremont McKenna College: Please use your own “voice,” especially when writing your personal statement. This should not be an exercise in packing in as many SAT-prep words as possible! Write about something that you care about, something that gives us a window into your perspective/experience. Students who take some calculated risks in their essays, and in doing so, really show their personality.

John Latting, director of admissions at Johns Hopkins University: Get your pen and paper or saddle up to the word processor; the important thing to keep in mind is, don’t write as if there is a correct answer. Don’t be too cautious. It seems to me that we work hard to craft questions that prevent that, but we see students who are too cautious. Be adventurous intellectually-write unconventionally. Applicants have more freedom than they think, and it’s in their interest to use that flexibility.

Lorne T. Robinson, dean of admissions and financial aid at Macalester College: Be yourself. Use your own voice. “Own” your essay rather than letting someone else tell you what to write. Address any questions the admissions committee may have about your application up front. Tell your “story,” if you have one.

Alyssa Sinclair, assistant director of admissions at Middlebury College: Most students should “write what they know,” and not worry about being completely original in their subject matter. In most cases, we care more about how a student writes about a topic than the topic itself. Ideally, we love to see truly fine writing that reflects mature thought, a mastery of the language and mechanics, and a topic that reveals a great deal about the applicant simply because it tells a good story. Essays of that caliber are fairly rare, so we also enjoy pieces that possess the elements mentioned above but may not have them in equal share.

Joel Bauman, dean of admissions at New College of Florida: Once you’ve written your essays, let them sit for a few days. It’s very tempting to hit the “send” button or drop them in the mail, but it’s definitely a good idea not only to proofread for mechanical errors, but also to consider whether there is a real point to each essay. Are they well developed? Do the ideas flow logically? Our college writing consultant points out that she can teach someone how to use semicolons, but she can’t teach them how to think. We’re looking for some sort of organized, well-reasoned argument, without typos or grammar errors-looking for the ability to reason and think clearly and make a reasoned argument on some topic. The greater the evidence of thoughtfulness, the better. The essay should show some level of sophistication, technical skill, and reasoning ability. We love to see a clear sense of engagement-that the student hasn’t just fulfilled her or his obligation to submit an essay, but has really thought about it and obviously cares about the topic. We also get a big kick out of colorful metaphors-although these, in and of themselves, will probably not make the difference in an admission decision.

Carol Lunkenheimer, dean of admissions at Northwestern University: Answer the whole question. For example, we have a question that asks what an applicant would do with five minutes of airtime; what would you talk about and why? Kids don’t answer the why part, they go on about the subject but there’s no analysis, no reflection. In addition, we like writing with a natural voice. Don’t be formal if you’re not formal. If you’re funny, be humorous. We’re trying to get a sense of what you’re like; stay with your natural voice.

Jim Miller, dean of admissions at Bowdoin College: Keep it narrow, get readers’ attention right away, and stay on task, on point. We like to see things that are personal and simple. People try to get complex. Things that are meaningful come across that way as you read them.

Janet Rapelye, dean of admissions at Wellesley College: I’m a complete sucker for the grandparent essay, i.e., what I learned from them, what they taught me, what they taught my family. In my 22 years in admissions, I haven’t read a bad grandparent essay. I like to hear about gratitude for someone in your life, such as a family member or favorite teacher.

A few more pointers

Grammatical accuracy is key. A thoughtful essay that offers true insight will stand out unmistakably, but if it is riddled with poor grammar and misspelled words, it will not receive serious consideration. It is critical that you avoid all grammatical errors. We just can’t stress this enough. Misspellings, awkward constructions, run-on sentences, and misplaced modifiers all cast doubt on your efforts. Admissions officers will wonder, how much care did you put into the essay’s composition?
Good writing is writing that is easily understood. You want to get your point across, not bury it in words. Don’t talk in circles. Your prose should be clear and direct. If an admissions officer has to struggle to figure out what you are trying to say, you’re in trouble. Also, almost every college requires freshmen to complete a course or two in composition, even if you plan on majoring in a subject that isn’t writing-intensive, like chemistry. If you can demonstrate that you have good writing skills, you’ll have a serious edge in these required courses.
Get to the point in three pages. Don’t be long-winded and boring. Admissions officers don’t like long essays. Would you, if you were in their shoes? Be brief. Be focused. And if there is a word limit, abide by it.