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09/04/2019

What is a good sentence that will grab the readers attention?

QUESTION
What is a good sentence that will grab the readers attention?
i am writing an essay over Langston Hughes and his poem “Mother to Son” but i could really use a good sentence to start the essay. Something that will grab the readers attention. Thank you so much for the help!!!

ANSWER
There’s even a formula for this sort of thing:

In “_________,” [author’s full name] [DOES something] by using ___________.

In other words, a good thesis sentence for any literary analysis contains four elements:

1. Title
2. Author’s full name (after this, just the last name is enough)
3. PURPOSE
4. METHOD

Example:

In the opening of his short story “Mule in the Yard,” William Faulkner creates the illusion of perpetual motion by using periodic sentences; parallel verb forms, each with its own adverb; compounding of multiple complex independent clauses, each with its own subject; and manipulation of focus in a cinematic manner.

After this point the author becomes simply “Faulkner.” Note that this thesis sentence is a promise to your reader:

1. Faulkner’s purpose will remain the object of every paragraph that follows.

2. You have named four techniques, so your reader should expect at least a paragraph for each of them; actually, you will need two paragraphs for each technique.

3. You promise to cover the techniques IN THE ORDER you have named them.

4. In your thesis each sentence following the thesis sentence will broadly state what each technique is and how it works.

5. Those sentences will all become topic sentences of your paragraphs; you will develop those topics by discussing concrete examples and showing HOW they work.

6. Your conclusion will wrap up, in a general way, how the elements contribute to the overall effect.

Your paper will consist (in this case) of a thesis paragraph, a conclusion, and (probably) two paragraphs for each method he uses. At about 1/3 of a page for a good paragraph you will have 10 good, meaty paragraphs covering about 3 1/2 pages, or about 1500=1800 words.

Write each paragraph on a separate sheet to maintain focus. Then, on a separate sheet, list your thesis and topic sentences; a bad one will jump out at you. Revise as needed, then assemble the whole thing. Follow these instructions, turn the crank, and out comes a B (if you don’t screw up the grammar) at least. My old Dept. Chairman called this method Modular Composition, and I have never known it to fail. In slightly different forms, you can use it all the way up to a Master’s thesis at least.

Before you start worrying about “grabbers” and “hooks,” write the paper this way. You can always add an introductory dramatic sentence or two at the very beginning, after you can see what you’re doing AFTER the fact. As the great poet W.H. Auden put it, “How do I know what I mean until I see what I say?”