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09/08/2019

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who can help me to correct this essay ?
i am learning english and i have this homework but i think it have some mistakes so who can help me please

My trip to England

In few words I could say that this trip change me because this amazing experience is something that I will never forget. Before school told us about this trip I was looking for something like that and when they told me about this I couldn’t believe that something like that was happening to me I was so exited and all the waiting and It was worth the wait.
In the first days things were hard but as I was with my friends we have fun in each experience. In college people were different they dress and act really different but different in a good way because there you can see that people can dress and act different and they are not excluded by the rest so is good to see that in other places you have more freedom like to be who you really are.
Each weekend we have a trip to a place in U.K the first one we went to London and is was amazing the first time I saw the big Ben I couldn’t believe that I was there in front to that big clock, also I liked to see that the city y pretty organized and clean so is a nice place to be and maybe one day live, 2 days weren’t enough to watch the most important things in London so the next weekend we went to oxford and then again to London. Oxford was kind of similar to Cambridge but with more commercial things but I like it. And finally the 3rd weekend we went to Scotland the most beautiful place I have ever been, I love each part of it all the landscapes, people, food, castles and history I wanted to stay there forever .
I would love to write many things about the trip but this page is no enough so finishing this ,all the bad and good things that happen in this trip make it the best trip I have ever had .

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My trip to England

In few words I could say that this trip change me because this amazing experience is something that I will never forget. Before school told us about this trip I was looking for something like that and when they told me about this I couldn’t believe that something like that was happening to me I was so exited and all the waiting and It was worth the wait. (Is this your introduction? Where is your topic sentence? … i
In the first days things were hard but as I was with my friends we have fun in each experience. In college people were different they dress and act really different but different in a good way because there you can see that people can dress and act different and they are not excluded by the rest so is good to see that in other places you have more freedom like to be who you really are.
Each weekend we have a trip to a place in U.K the first one we went to London and is was amazing the first time I saw the big Ben I couldn’t believe that I was there in front to that big clock, also I liked to see that the city y pretty organized and clean so is a nice place to be and maybe one day live, 2 days weren’t enough to watch the most important things in London so the next weekend we went to oxford and then again to London. Oxford was kind of similar to Cambridge but with more commercial things but I like it. And finally the 3rd weekend we went to Scotland the most beautiful place I have ever been, I love each part of it all the landscapes, people, food, castles and history I wanted to stay there forever .
I would love to write many things about the trip but this page is no enough so finishing this ,all the bad and good things that happen in this trip make it the best trip I have ever had .

This does not look like an essay at all. In fact, this looks more like a narration, although I was not able to understand the point or meaning of it.

En essay is composed of paragraphs, topic sentences, content, examples, illustrations, thesis statement, and conclusion. You also need to follow the MLA format.

So you can have a general guideline of how to write an essay go here .. which in your case is a narrative essay
http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resour…

To know what is a paragraph look a this linked http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resour…

A thesis statement is basically the point or main argument you want to make. What is what you want you’re reader to know?

for instance… Not only did I maintain my friend’s friendship by keeping his secret, but I learned the importance of being loyal and just.

Feel free to email me or ask me questions …

Good luck!